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    November 23rd, 2007


    Pause by MagentaBear

    Summary: “This has been the strangest night of your life, a detached section of your mind realizes. You’ve never been so sick and frightened and confused and yet you’ve never hugged so many people.” The final battle, as experienced by Ginny Weasley. Oneshot, 5,106 Words.

    Why You Should Care: There are three things most fanfic writers avoid like the plague: second person point-of-view, stream of consciousness, and action. In this fic, MagentaBear takes on all three at the same time, to great effect. Over all, it’s very, very good. In some places, it closely approaches excellence. MagentaBear also somehow manages to give us a solid characterisation of Ginny on top of it all, and in spots it’s as much a character study as it is anything else. There is a great momentum in this fic, except where MagentaBear calls a full stop and purposefully brakes to a standstill, starting and stopping deftly in a way that further punctuates Ginny’s experience.

    Why You Might Not Care: There isn’t quite enough intensity behind the action, and occasionally Ginny appears to have more time to think than would have actually been afforded her. Having said that, also keep in mind that action sequences are far, far tougher to write than most people think; MagentaBear has tackled the biggest battle in Harry Potter canon, and come out with her head held high. This fic could also do with a little trimming and a little tightening here and there: it’s good, but cutting out five or six hundred words of excess would make it really good.

    posted by afterthree

    2 Responses to “Pause”

    1. Sara Says:
      November 23rd, 2007 at 11:57 am

      Er, just a note — this story is in second-person, I believe, not first (“I” is first, this story uses “you”).

      But that’s not the point. The point is, this was EXCELLENT.

    3. afterthree Says:
      November 23rd, 2007 at 12:02 pm

      You’re right, of course. That’s what I get for writing recs at 3am in the morning when I’m sleepy and not proof-reading before publishing… 😛 Good thing I’ve got people who like me enough to poke me when I’m stupid so I can fix it.

      Cheers, Sara!